Month: April 2018

I did not find the revision strategy worksheets as helpful as I would have liked, and I assume this is because I have always been decent at planning out my paper and paragraphs. What I would have found more helpful is a general guide to MLA format to remind me of how to properly format my paper. This could have also helped with me citations and when certain ones were necessary for what various situations. As I have been progressing as a writer this year, I have immensely improved in all aspects of writing other than MLA format. Outside of English 110, I have noticed my writing improve in my lab reports. Not exactly my style of writing, but the easy transferring of my thoughts into words in a better time frame. I wish I would have taken this class first semester instead of second semester because it would have been extremely helpful having these skills before having to write three environmental issues papers. What I did appreciate were the comments on my papers, because they allowed me to focus on what I need to improve about my writing, and what I have been doing well on so that I could continue to maintain those writing skills.

My goal for this essay is to properly cite and format my paper. This seems to be the only thing I am truly struggling with considering I have improved everywhere else in my ability to write. I would also like to make a second goal of connecting all my topic sentences with my main claim sentences so that my paper will be as consistent and on track as possible. In order to properly cite and format my work, I am going to refer to the link you included in your comments in my last essay that will help me check if I have everything correct and in MLA format. What I see as my biggest challenge is having to generate enough material on the aspect of beauty in society I am trying to argue. talking about having a healthy balance of chaos and harmony being the constant struggle that allows us to define beauty because we would not be able to call something beautiful of we had something chaotic or tragic to compare it to. If a problem comes up that I cannot seem to figure out on my own I have friends on my football team in my class that I would ask for help since I see them nearly everyday, and if they could not figure it out either I would ask professor Emerson or visit Digispace.

For my essay I am going to use pictures to assist my essay in visual communications and spatial communication by arranging my essay in a certain way. I want to arrange it around my ideas so that the pictures will give the reader a better understanding of my quotes and explanation of my quotes. I hope to use the citation suggestions used in my previous essay to better format this essay. I also plan on using hyperlinks.

To plan my essay, I will begin by talking about my own definition of beauty. my intro will lead into my thesis, and for my first paragraph I will reflect on my definition, and what it means to me. I hope use find pictures, links, or both to further support my argument. in my second paragraph, i plan to use Armstrong’s arguments to support my thesis. for my third paragraph im going to use a naysayer paragraph and talk about why my argument would trump another argument. I would then include other paragraphs that support my essay, discuss what society’s definition of beauty is, and what should change about it. I would then conclude my essay.

I believe that Armstrong’s statement, “To regard beauty as a luxury adornment or a social signifier was to miss the true potential of the experience,” was a way in which he wanted to convey that beauty can just be beauty and have no one definition by which society has to give to it. Beauty to me is the feeling I get when I come home from school on breaks and get to see my family. Seeing my dog approach an older age makes me appreciate her more, and all the other things my family members do for me. Having to younger brothers I have paved a path for while instilling in them what I have learned through my experiences is certainly a wonderful feeling. Especially when I get to see the men they are becoming. My mother always asking if there is anything she can do for me, my father always striking up conversations with the three of his sons about sports or serious topics are memories I find beautiful. To others, they may chalk up the idea of family not being an important thing to them, or even something they do not enjoy that could be problematic in their life. However beauty to me does not have to be beauty to someone else, and beauty is given its own definition by whoever decides to call something beautiful by which they deem appropriate. Beauty to the culture I’ve been raised in would directly coincide with music. Where we live there are so many different cultures and backgrounds, but we all find beauty and appreciation in the music we love. The ability to relate to others and express yourself just through your own taste in music. New England in its own culture would always find the patriots winning the super bowl one of the most beautiful things to witness, because it brings out such raw emotion and happiness.

Armstrong often quoted Schiller and reflected on his thoughts, writing, “For Schiller, true beauty is whatever speaks powerfully to both sides of our nature at the same time. When we find something beautiful, we are called towards a vision of harmonious perfection. This is not only a quality in the object, but a longing in ourselves.” (Armstrong). When we seem a chance for our moral character to act and do something we believe society would respect one for, this creates a sense of happiness and pride in the individual. For example, someone snatches an old woman’s purse on a sidewalk and you chase the thief down and catch him. you had no relationship to the woman or the person stealing from her, but your own morals were called into question as a bystander with the ability to right something you viewed as wrong, and you acted on those morals so that you would reward yourself with the sense of pride that in itself can be seen as beautiful, and to prevent the feeling of guilt and self-shame for not defending your morals and allowing something to occur that you viewed as wrong.