Month: February 2018

First Quote

Southan would argue that it doesn’t matter if Kaphar’s work is unique. “Simply put, EAs want to reduce suffering and increase lifespan and happiness.”

Southan would argue that it doesn’t matter if Kaphar’s work is unique. He comments, “Simply put, EAs want to reduce suffering and increase lifespan and happiness” (Southan).

To alter this quote, I chose to add context prior to the quote that allows the paper to flow more smoothly into the quote instead of abruptly adding it. I also added my citation, but could not find the page number when I found the text online.

Second Quote

Kaphar would argue to Southan that  Southan’s essay at times makes you forget he is in fact an artist. Kaphar’s TED talk makes you want to become an artist and nearly join his very cause of recreating past sculptures and paintings to reflect our current societal views. “I want to make paintings, I want to make sculptures that are honest. That wrestle with the struggles of our past, but speak to the diversity and advancement of our present”.

Kaphar would argue to Southan that  Southan’s essay at times makes you forget he is in fact an artist. Kaphar’s TED talk makes you want to become an artist and nearly join his very cause of recreating past sculptures and paintings to reflect our current societal views. He states during his TED talk, “I want to make paintings, I want to make sculptures that are honest. That wrestle with the struggles of our past, but speak to the diversity and advancement of our present” (Kaphar).

To make the context of this quote better fit in my essay, I added an intro to the quote so that the author knows where the quote is coming from when Titus Kaphar states it. I think this adds more depth to the quote and structure to the paragraph. I also added my citation to the end of the quote so that the reader knows where its coming from.

rough draft paragraphs

Rhys Southan’s Is Art a Waste of Time and Titus Kaphlar’s Ted Talk representing alternate views on art and artists’ influence in today’s society. Southan’s essay describes struggle for all artists not finding a sense of originality and being viewed as uninfluential on an individual scale. Titus Kaphlar’s TED talk describes a much different story where a simple question from his son about a sculpture in front of the Smithsonian Museum motivates him to work on amending all historical artwork to portray a more modern cultural view. Art is one of the most influential ways someone’s ideas can be supported or changed. It is its own language, its own expression. Both artists have the ability to change the world in their own way but their individual approach to the situation clash.

What would a conversation between Southan and Kaphlar about the topic of art’s influence sound like? It would most certainly be interesting, considering one of them is questioning whether it is or isn’t, and the other one is doing worldwide talks and appearances. Southan’s essay at times makes you forget he is in fact an artist. Kaphar’s TED talk makes you want to become an artist and nearly join his very cause of recreating past sculptures and paintings to reflect our current societal views. Southan’s frequent doubt of artists when he himself leaves you slightly confused because the opinions he writes about often flip flop between one another.

Revised paragraphs

Rhys Southan’s Is Art a Waste of Time and Titus Kaphlar’s Ted Talk representing alternate views on art and artists’ influence in today’s society. Southan’s essay describes struggle for all artists not finding a sense of originality and being viewed as uninfluential on an individual scale. Titus Kaphlar’s TED talk describes a much different story where a simple question from his son about a sculpture in front of the Smithsonian Museum motivates him to work on amending all historical artwork to portray a more modern cultural view. Art is one of the most influential ways someone’s ideas can be supported or changed. It is its own language, its own expression. Both artists have the ability to change the world in their own way but their individual approach to the situation clash.

What would a conversation between Southan and Kaphlar about the topic of art’s influence sound like? It would most certainly be interesting, considering one of them is questioning whether it is or isn’t, and the other one is doing worldwide talks and appearances. Southan would argue that Kaphar’s work would not make much of a difference and that it was a waste of time trying to use art to change the world. Kaphar would argue to Southan that  Southan’s essay at times makes you forget he is in fact an artist. Kaphar’s TED talk makes you want to become an artist and nearly join his very cause of recreating past sculptures and paintings to reflect our current societal views. Southan’s frequent doubt of artists when he himself leaves you slightly confused because the opinions he writes about often flip flop between one another.

The changes I made were ones I felt were significant. I kept important sentences, and revised the sentences that my peer’s and Professor Emerson suggested to make changes to. Something I also felt was important was to keep sentences or phrases that my peers thought made my essay strong. I made revisions to the sentences following the intro to my second paragraph to give the reader a greater understanding of Southan and Kaphar’s views. I also edited the last sentence to my first paragraph to better express my views and not Southan or Kaphar’s views. I feel these changes gave my paper more direction and created a more focused paper that the reader can more easily understand.

My goal for this essay is to achieve a well written 5 page paper or between 1100-1400 words. I often struggle to come up with enough substance to fill out an essay to the full extent that a teacher wants. Usually I end up burning up and have to scrap together ideas in order to meet a word or page count. to Achieve this goal without have to scrap more ideas together that just fill space, I am going to list out ideas that I can use to fill out sections and not create a paper where the end is used to fill space. if a challenge comes up that proves to difficult for me to solve on my own I will ask multiple peers for their help since I have a lot of friends in this class, and if that fails I would e-mail you. I have yet to run into a problem that I cannot personally solve on my own when it comes to writing an essay so running into a problem to large for me to figure out is not my biggest worry. Another goal of mine is to add more evidence in the form of quotes to help persuade my readers further towards my opinion. quotes are also a good solution to papers that lack the ability to fill a page count or word number. Quotes can also hurt a writer if the are done poorly and have to depth or lack of relevance to the paragraph or idea they support, so I need to be careful when choosing what quotes for what ideas or else it could fail to aid in persuasion or possibly push the reader away from my essay. I can also ask my peers for their opinion on my quotes so that I can get a second opinion on if the lack relevance or are a good fit for for the paragraph.

Commenting on Eric’s paper i said, “This is a great idea to bring into the paper. Single photos can often provide plenty of morale to world movements making it very influencial”. this is an idea comment because I thought it was a good thought to talk about photos and their impact on art.

Editing a peer’s text was a new experience I had not done until taking this class. I have always done review with the teachers themselves. Reading the text allowed me to see another personality in how someone else writes their intro paragraph. I also enjoyed editing the paper because I made me think about what was wrong with my own intro paragraph, and gave me new ideas I could play with that might improve my intro for my paper. If I can begin to incorporate new styles of writing then my options of stylistic writing expand and give me more breathing room to work with.

Titus Kaphar approach to art is not on a massive scale such as the EA.  He is doing what he can to change the minds of those who view paintings to look deeper into those being oppressed from within, and asks the viewer to make amendments to our country’s current historical sculptures and paints by creating knew ones right along side them that reflect our current views and societal norms. He confronts the topic of racism without ever mention the word, which I found interesting. he always referred to the people in the works of art he discussed as characters portrayed by the author. Kaphar’s approach to influential art was original, irreplaceable, unless someone where to begin doing copying his work, and impactful.

Southan has a more negative idea about art’s ability to influence the world, as on multiple occasions he writes that artists are replaceable. the EA claims that all artists are selfish and that the only way to contribute to society is to donate a large some of money so they can use that money in a way they see fit to make a difference. Kaphar’s choice to not only allow his paints to make a visual comment on his view of society but do TED Talks on why he does these paintings gives him a lot more exposure and spreads his message to an audience that would not normally go to art galleries. Southan’s assumption that artists have little originality and can be replaced at anytime and have little effect in societal contribution is hard for me to see his point of view when Kaphar is directly confronting our nations history of oppression by creating knew works of art right along side the old ones to show our knew much more accepting culture.