First Quote

Southan would argue that it doesn’t matter if Kaphar’s work is unique. “Simply put, EAs want to reduce suffering and increase lifespan and happiness.”

Southan would argue that it doesn’t matter if Kaphar’s work is unique. He comments, “Simply put, EAs want to reduce suffering and increase lifespan and happiness” (Southan).

To alter this quote, I chose to add context prior to the quote that allows the paper to flow more smoothly into the quote instead of abruptly adding it. I also added my citation, but could not find the page number when I found the text online.

Second Quote

Kaphar would argue to Southan that  Southan’s essay at times makes you forget he is in fact an artist. Kaphar’s TED talk makes you want to become an artist and nearly join his very cause of recreating past sculptures and paintings to reflect our current societal views. “I want to make paintings, I want to make sculptures that are honest. That wrestle with the struggles of our past, but speak to the diversity and advancement of our present”.

Kaphar would argue to Southan that  Southan’s essay at times makes you forget he is in fact an artist. Kaphar’s TED talk makes you want to become an artist and nearly join his very cause of recreating past sculptures and paintings to reflect our current societal views. He states during his TED talk, “I want to make paintings, I want to make sculptures that are honest. That wrestle with the struggles of our past, but speak to the diversity and advancement of our present” (Kaphar).

To make the context of this quote better fit in my essay, I added an intro to the quote so that the author knows where the quote is coming from when Titus Kaphar states it. I think this adds more depth to the quote and structure to the paragraph. I also added my citation to the end of the quote so that the reader knows where its coming from.